familiar celestial panorama…
“paranoia”
i slowed down,
choosing to spend the day
chasing
down bullet proof jackets,
or something like that,
normalize the breathing,
bring down the pulse.
what weren’t quite gunshots
echoed off what wasn’t
quite the door. nobody
should ever be knocking like
that.
quick & dirty
clean-up tends to follow;
pressure cooker philosophy
due to the manner of arrival.
i don’t set the rules,
just tryin’ to evade them.
This entry was posted on August 7, 2010 at 2:41 am and is filed under Philosophy, Poetry, thoughtful trips, Uncategorized with tags funny morning stories, Learning About Life, Poetry. You can follow any responses to this entry through the RSS 2.0 feed. You can leave a response, or trackback from your own site.
November 22, 2010 at 5:12 am
I like your style. The poem is making me paranoid too!
http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2010/11/22/magic/
November 22, 2010 at 10:26 am
Thanks kindly. Enjoyed your poem as well.
crb.
November 22, 2010 at 7:54 am
evade? hmmm i forgot that is paranoia. good job!
November 22, 2010 at 10:27 am
Appreciate it. Paranoia can be fun.
crb.
November 22, 2010 at 12:45 pm
It was probably just somebody looking to sell you a timeshare. (LOL!)
Nice piece!
November 22, 2010 at 4:11 pm
quirky and clever. Middle stanza my favourite, the ‘not quite gunshots’ etc ‘nobody should ever be knocking like that’. The brevity of the piece adds impact for me. One line stands out as being unneeded and also semi-repeating another line (but not in a ‘using repetition as poetic device’ kind of way) – ‘or something like that’ (line five, stanza one).
Great piece, dude
(mine are here- I put some older ones up that never saw much traffic-
http://lukepraterswordsalad.wordpress.com/2010/05/28/160/
http://lukepraterswordsalad.wordpress.com/2010/05/16/alice/
November 22, 2010 at 8:33 pm
Thanks man, will read them tonight. Funny you mentioned digging out older poems that didn’t get traffic; I did the same with one of my entries this week. Great minds think alike I spose…lol. Catch you later man.
crb.
November 22, 2010 at 11:43 pm
powerful piece.
the word choices are eloquent.
Thanks for sharing your talent with potluck today.
Happy Tuesday!