agonizingly obnoxious boys from mars…

late nights & empty pockets with a cigarette

don’t fall for your first impression;
if you can read me like a book just
imagine what i can do to you.
that ain’t a fair fight;
i’ll scratch, claw, stab & bleed,
but only when provoked by
more passion than hips ever
saw or tongues ever licked.

if you want to work up a good
sweat before fucking it out
between appointments & sheets,
there’s no better way. but me?
i can’t live frightened of every
raised voice or unknown
substance thrown down
a hole in the face.
where’s your

before you get disgusted,
you should know i’ve
stopped blinking when i
shave my face. still
funny how every colloquial
expression you agonize over
screams of desperation;
no matter your choice,
its has to find approval

have you ever considered
coloring outside the lines?
it’s optional, not mandatory; just
like marriage, except with crayons,
minus the sex & repercussions.
wanna try?


An old love poem I found on the bottom of a flip flop I wore to Sanibel Island while hunting shells & Island Cows. Doesn’t quite compete with this for vile imagery and absolute humor, but the point is worth thinking about. (Ain’t that gross? How’d they think of that? Somehow I think I might be able to guess, but not publicly.)

Inspired by an ‘Intervention’ episode (thanks a lot A & E…) again. I have really gotta stop watching that fucking show.

17 Responses to “agonizingly obnoxious boys from mars…”

  1. Scent of my heart Says:

    if you can read me like a book just
    imagine what i can do to you.
    that ainโ€™t a fair fight;
    iโ€™ll scratch, claw, stab & bleed,
    but only when provoked by
    more passion than hips ever
    saw or tongues ever licked.

    I can absolutely imagine that … Well, it was felt, all the way …

    Coloring outside the lines?

    • “Coloring outside the lines?”

      The two parts of the poem are connected the same way cause & effect are related. But think quantum physics connections, nothing tangible.

      Wow, you were fast on this one! I’m impressed. Good to spill words as always,


      • Scent of my heart Says:

        hehe, quantum physics connections, I was thinking more like to find the meaning in the life outside the ordinary boxes and rules, just was curious what were you thinking …

        I just logged in and your post was first on my FB home page, so why not start the day with some quality poetry ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. You call this a love poem!!! TWISTED…hmmm I like…you and your twisted ways, yes sirree! I dig papi, I dig ๐Ÿ™‚

    • Hey, if I can’t redefine love poetry here, where else can I do it? Besides, isn’t love one of those things people tell their kids about to make them feel better, like Santa Claus or the Easter Bunny? Sorry, couldn’t resist. Working on answering your letter, you had me cracking the fuck up. Take care, thanks for the visit, and hope all is well,


      • “if I canโ€™t redefine love poetry here, where else can I do it?”
        From an unorthodox person/expressionist to you sir, I CONCUR!!! ๐Ÿ™‚

        uhm no, love is real papi, as real as the blisters after training for an upcoming half marathon with poorly fitted shoes, thou unbeliever you…

        grrr take your time on the letter, glad I did cause you are always killing me for sure, payback is an itch I tell yah lol, lol, lol


  3. “more passion than hips ever
    saw or tongues ever licked.” sounds good to me. who’s talking hierarchy of needs now? ๐Ÿ˜‰ love the “coloring outside the lines” bit– makes for a strong invitation.

    later, poet.


    • Always an honor to hear from ya, and I would take it by your reply that you read my comment. Do you think fucking would be om the top or the bottom of Maslows hierarchy? Besides, if you can’t learn & laugh while fucking, when can ya?

      Also – To answer the question in your comment, (no reply button!!!) I don’t post everything I write as I’m strongly against posting total shite, but you have to take a few chances if you wanna see what is possible and what ain’t. Get me? If not, email me someday, I’ll tell you a funny story about why I write so much. The real question is how far are you willing to go to write poems maybe 100 people will ever read (and that is if you’re lucky.) Me? Pretty fucking far.

      Hope all is well duder, always a pleasure.


  4. very sharp and acerbic. Great ending. Particularly liked the

    whereโ€™s your

    and colouring outside the lines, yeah

    Hear strong echoes of Bukowski, tonally (that’s a good thing). ‘not mandatory’ seems a little redundant after ‘optional’ though if I’m honest.

    Really enjoyed this, another good one man. Where you been recently? ๐Ÿ˜€ Hey come vote in the Challenge thing on the group, there are some fin entries… I wonder what you think of them? Quite a lot of our fellow-bloggers from Jingle and One Shot are active there now. Dynamic changes all the time… v interesting.

    Take it easy, and keep up the good stuff

    • Dude, congrats on the ever expanding empire that is ‘Facial Expression Poetry Circle.’ I will indeed come vote and promise one of these times I will get a poem submitted. You remember that line from the intro to
      ‘The Big Lebowski’?

      “And even if he’s a lazy man โ€“ and the Dude was most certainly that, quite possibly the laziest in Los Angeles County, which would place him high in the running for laziest worldwide.”

      Well, for many, many reasons, aside from the Los Angeles part, is a pretty accurate description of me. However, I feel bad for not getting more involved. That said, we will get this done. Somehow.

      Thanks for the visit and don’t be so shy about voicing your opinion. At least not here. I have it on good authority that the guy running the site has no shame and very little ego. You’re a good man Charlie Brown. Sunny skies & smooth seas for us all.


      • ” and donโ€™t be so shy about voicing your opinion. At least not here. I have it on good authority that the guy running the site has no shame and very little ego.”

        Why I am a fan of the brand, yes I iz lol

  5. This is one of the most interesting love poems i’ve read and strangely enough I actually liked it. It’s different and refreshing. You’ve made this very concrete that the words come up as images (or in my cases as scenes). I would have never thought of putting sex and crayons in the same poem, but that was genius. I love how you ended this poem. The other stanzas are quite straight forward, but the last one is the most indirect in the whole poem (well, that’s my impression, i might need closer reading).I think that’s a great way to end it.


    • Aloha 83! Always good to share words with you. Perhaps I can shed some light on your interpretation.

      Keep in mind the alternate title of the Jimmy Buffett song ‘Why Don’t We Get Drunk & Screw.’ First, the song is amongst his worst efforts, totally cliched piece of frat-boy trash that he should be embarrassed to perform it. More importantly, the alternate title of the song is “A Love Song From A Different Point Of View.”

      Now forget the song and just superimpose that title over the poem. Your reading was correct. Just more fun to approach the subject on a tangent. So that is a long winded way of saying “yes.”

      Always great to hear from you, hope all is well with the crazy pace of post-grad work & full time job. I’m amazed and in awe; that takes serious stamina. Take care and I will hit your page tomorrow when I do my daily poetry readings. Until then, stay up & good to see your avatar when I was checking the comments.


  6. Well, now, I had the chuckle and and all that, but down at the more wistful level of my heart, I read this as a true love poem. Were some rogue well past his days on Mars to whisper such sweet somethings in my ear, I’d be all “Oh, yes, let’s!”

    Oh, and as for the Maslow hierarchy, I say both top and bottom. No question.

    • That was along the lines I was reaching for; glad to see ya picked up on that. It is satirical to a point, but then again, what isn’t when too much time is spent thinking about it? For me it goes back to not taking much seriously. Preferences vary, as do rationale, but at the end of the day I think we all make life more complicated than it has to be in a lot of ways.

      Awesome about the Maslow comment. Let it never be said memes don’t spread as fast as anything else in life. Professor Dennet would be proud!


  7. belladonna23 Says:

    as always i love your attitude ๐Ÿ™‚ awesome piece man, and sometimes I find an old poem that I wrote and long forgot about too… well, ancient emotions are things that our hearts still treasure most, right? whether good or bad…. raw emotion is in my mine the most sacred of all that is human.

    • Too kind of you to say. I know I have said it before, but it makes my day to know something I write resonates with a reader, let alone the amazing comments & goodness from everyone in virtual-reality-land.

      Especially interesting you refer to raw emotion as sacred; I would agree 100% but hadn’t thought of expressing it in those terms. Brilliance from all corners of late. Another day that all is okay with the world! Always good to hear from ya, take care.


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