instructions from the setting sun…

instructions from the setting sun

i swapped part of my hard won sassafras
luck for one green flash salute to the sun
as it faded from view. transfixed under
splendid emerald refractions, i wandered the
market picking through variously flavored
evening-hour solutions priced to move.

sunset argued convincingly for an immediate
administration of unconstrained-salvation. a
visiting pharmacotherapist told me to “take
what ya get.” he didn’t need to tell me twice.
background scenery changed before my eyes
& behind my back. waking up home in bed was
an expectation fulfilled after that long
conversation with the recently departed sun.

homegrown early-morning hallucinations say
i’m late to hit the road. reports of barricades
blocking sections of pavement between here
& there are yet to be confirmed, but i’ve got
faith in detours. just to be safe, i changed the
setting from ‘innocent-angel’ to ‘easy-wicked’
before gettin’ too far down to give a rational
explanation to any of the uninitiated that might
be waitin’ on me along the way.

good reason to take extra time on prep-work;
small talk banter bordering on gibberish won’t
help matters with a schedule to keep. detailed
instructions from the neighborhood star offers
part of an explanation & a promise to return soon.
another sassafras exchange gets me everything
i need assembled for travel. seven tins of madness,
gasoline & a day-ending emerald flash in the sky.

in a few breaths i’ll wake up somewhere else,
wondering where the fuck i am n’ how i got
there while trying to figure out the fastest way
back to Cayo Hueso. i’ve always wanted to see
that green flash when the sun starts playin’ a
half game of hide & seek behind the horizon.


Dedicated to the city of Key West. CoB,O may be long dead and gone but the spirit of Marvin Gardens lives on. Anyone going to MoTM 2011?

33 Responses to “instructions from the setting sun…”

  1. Tight write… wondered where that green flash comes from… the go ahead to return to me… hmmm…

    • Short answer I gleaned was differences in refraction times for light through denser air pockets. I’m sure I am butchering the answer, but it is a beautiful sight either way. Thanks for the visit!


  2. Some great description here and the words conjure up wonderful images. Sunsets are amazing!

  3. Your descxription of the sunset is like a walk through a dream CRB. Great write ๐Ÿ˜‰

  4. Amazing, love the reference to emerald refractions, and green flash. Very vivid imagery you’ve got in this one, kind of brings out a feeling of nostalgia.

  5. how enchanting your writing is.. ๐Ÿ˜‰

  6. This reminds me of that old school talkin blues thing. You can go a long way on seven tins of madness…

    • I love Talkin’ Blues songs! Some Say Dylan cornered the market, others say nobody did it like Ochs. Me? Well I like both of them a lot, but for my money Townes Van Zandt is the only Talkin’ Blues you need. Thanks for the visit HW, hope all is well,


  7. beautiful,
    you have a way with words…

    keep it up.

  8. hmmmmmmmmm… ๐Ÿ™‚ enjoy!!! I will send you a pic ๐Ÿ™‚ lol

  9. I’ve always wanted to see the green flash. Great write! Makes me want to go back to Key West RIGHT NOW! Thanks for visiting my blog too.

  10. Chaka Sichangi Says:

    “homegrown early-morning hallucinations say
    iโ€™m late to hit the road”

    Remarkable. You paint beautiful pictures.

  11. Beautiful imagery. Never made it quite so far, only Fort L. It was beautiful there and your description paints futher south even better.

  12. Scent of my heart Says:

    I think after all the lovely comments before me, there isn’t a word left for me to praise your writing /smiles/ but then you know I adore it… So let me say I love the new theme and the domain name … Bravo! Where did the flip-flops go?

    • The flip flops are waiting for the 6 inches of snow to melt! Love to watch it fall but with three busted discs in my back I am confined to the flat for a few days. Long story, doesn’t matter. I keep the homeplace very well stocked with all the wants, and most of the needs. Hope all is well, thanks for swinging through!


  13. Well put. Key West is a state of mind. The only way to travel is to go with the flow. And be sure to turn westward at the end of the day and walk with the rest of the sun-drugged lemmings to Mallory Square. The whole experience is like a flashback to Mr. Toad’s Wild Ride. I love it.

  14. yelena m. Says:

    What a colorful poem and your style of writing is unique.Words as if danced on my screen when I read it. Thanks. ๐Ÿ™‚

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