visage in lyrical form

scared to look

(verse 1)

one singularly powerful moment
in an otherwise blase affair.
judgmental impression,
the worst kind of pretension;
punishment completely unfair.
a mystery face in the mirror,
nothing is quite what it seems.
wherever we’re going,
it best not stop snowing
i don’t want to slip off to dream.

(chorus)

so where is this going,
what are you gettin’ at?
am i supposed to want you
with no answer for that?
there’s all kinds of problems
you can’t even see;
why waste my time pretending
you give a shit about me

(verse 2)

ordered to demand salvation,
i want only what’s owed to me;
weaknesses are all the same,
easier to lay a backup claim
to things that i’m not i’ll soon be

(chorus)

so where is this going,
what are you gettin’ at?
am i supposed to want you
with no answer for that?
there’s all kinds of problems
you can’t even see;
why waste my time pretending
you give a shit about me

(verse 3)

last miles of freedom on asphalt,
fighting desire to stop in my tracks;
tired & wired & got lost on the way,
ditchin’ me nights you had promised to stay,
ya disappeared & now you want me back?

(chorus)

where is this going,
what are you gettin’ at?
am i supposed to want you
with no answer for that?
there’s all kinds of problems
you can’t even see;
why waste my time pretending
you give a shit about me

—————————————

Inspired by the most beautiful dancer I ever did see. Can’t bury everything all at once you know. Fuck it dude. Let’s go bowling. Oh, that’s right, I can’t. Damn POS spinal cord.

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19 Responses to “visage in lyrical form”

  1. Oh I wanna see.. I have Tylenol 3! weee

    • T3’s can be fun. Usually, I just say yes and let the morning sun decide if it was too much, or a bad mix. I figure why not let the universe light the way for me. It’s worked so far. Thanks for the visit Boog (you didn’t happen to play first base for the Baltimore Orioles and make kick ass bbq by any chance? I know, that’s asking a lot but why not ask? I’d hate to not know something because I was worried about looking foolish asking!)

      crb.

  2. so when are you going to sing this for us…tight chorus…and quite the journey in verse…not sure id go back though..

    • Actually I have for years been looking for a musician looking for a lyricist. Funny you should mention that, I usually don’t get much response on lyrics I post. Thought I would see if anyone wanted to write a hook for the lyrics and see what it would sound like. I wish had musical talent! I’ll post more lyrics later, shit, you never know. Thanks for the visit brutha.

      crb.

      addendum – we’re humans. We go back for more not because it’s fun or the right thing to do, but because we move in a general circadian rhythm unconsciously; i.e. baby looks for a hubby like daddy and Jr. is looking for another mother. If nobody ever goes back, who’s gonna clean up the leftover bloody bits? They start to stink something awful after a little while in the heat of such passions.

      crb.

  3. Funny thing song lyrics, they often don’t work on the page. I find I usually have to tweak lyrics to work as a poem and vice versa. These work as both though crb. I particularly like the last verse. I’m blessed in that I have two musicians living with me (my sons) who’ve recorded quite a few of the songs I’ve written, which loosely translates as they nicked my poems and made turned them into songs which was pretty cool. I’m still waiting for my freakin royalty cheques though haha I can send you the links if you fancy a listen. Enjoyed your addendum too, bloody bits indeed!

    Carys (Julie FEPC)

    • Totally agreed on relationship between poetry/lyrics. I think it helped that this started out as a poem called ‘Visage’ that I reconfigured and edited into another format. That is pretty kick-ass about your sons recording your poetry as music. Very awesome, and if you wouldn’t mind sharing I’d love to hear it. Feel free to send the checks as well!!!! Thanks for the kindness, hope all is well,

      crb.

  4. That chorus gets me right in the gut! Can relate and think the surrounding stanzas a very good. W”Why waste your time pretending / you give a shit about me” Strikes a chord. I’m sure many have felt that way. Cheers, CF

  5. That’s a great anti-love song, I think–not that it doesn’t deal with love or anything. I like the way there’s almost no sentimentality in it, neither of the gushing ain’t love grand variety nor the o woe iz meeee! she done me wrong type–it’s very pragmatic and to the point. That’s rare in love poems and especially rare in song lyrics, which tend to let the music over-ride the clarity and quality of the words many times. Personally I agree with the pov in the chorus here, and I especially like these lines: “..ordered to demand salvation,/ i want only what’s owed to me…”

    PS Like the new site format.

    • As Phil Leotardo once said, “there’s no scraps in my scrapbook.” Though the original poem (‘Visage’) was written several years ago as I re-edited it I was channeling all the anger that still lies under the surface of my skin (that’s a story for another time…) ‘Woe is me’ is the usual mode for breakup songs, and I can’t lie and say I haven’t written my fair share, but lately, it’s hard to explain…seeing things differently again, which is usually karma’s method of telling me I need to make a change. No need for sadness anymore; that time has passed.

      Thanks very much for your comment. Appreciate the sentiment. I like the site design, but it still lacks a certain razor blade edge that I’m looking for. It’s on the right track, but I’m thinking about what I want to do with it and have some ideas (my favorite phrase next to plausible deniability.) Take care,

      crb.

  6. That is awesome. Way better than “Call me Cleopatra, cuz I’m da Queen of Denial.” You need to find a singer/musician. Country or maybe rock. Not folk or blues though. Too much sass in there.

    • I was thinking something along the lines of DBT or Hayseed Dixie. Ever hear this?

      crb.

      • Yep, on a blog. Maybe here? I went to YouTube, and listened to both DBT and other Hayseed Dixie songs. I’m not sure what to call that style (Rockabilly, maybe?), but I suppose I could see your lyrics in that style. I think I’d like it better done a bit straighter, though. Despite the sort of slang and irreverance, there is a universal theme that a lot of people would relate to, I think.

  7. We may deny all we want, but sooner or later, we gotta face facts!! They may be sweet, they may be bitter… but that’s what they are! Facts!
    Loved the song/poem…the chorus really stung! But it was awesome nonetheless! You really should sing this one and embed it in here…

    • I am currently looking for someone to help me write some music to this. If I can get it all together, or get it to some band who wants it, I will post it here. Thanks much K, & remember, “sometimes you eat the bear, and sometime, well, he eats you.” Good to hear from ya,

      crb.

  8. Excellent mix of raw emotion, slick flow, and song-ish structure. Superb work.

    • Danke SI. (You aren’t related to Chris are you? If so tell him I love his music and only missed him at Wolftrap because Buffett was playing Nissan Pavilion the exact same night. I was bummed but will catch a show someday.) Take it easy,

      crb.

  9. belladonna23 Says:

    ahh… songs. i love music. I love pretty much every type of creative expression there is (however, i even consider martial arts beautiful. some may not agree, but i see it as a physical expression of raw emotion. what i like best.) but music can be extremely powerful…
    keep looking for a musician. with the right melodies, you could make some pretty amazing songs

    • I’m a music junkie to the point where I collect discographies rather than albums. (Who says ya can’t have it all?!) Agree with you on the beauty of all types of creative expression. It is all part of the same process done to different ends. I will keep looking for a someone to write some music with. You know what happened when Shel Silverstein wrote for Dr. Hook & The Medicine Show, dontcha? It was beautiful.

      crb.

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